My 2013 NaNo was the third instalment of the Moonstone Chronicles, which I am currently editing. It seemed like a good idea at the time, but the truth was I hadn’t finished Lucky Dog yet so figuring out what was happening in the next book was a little problematic. All I knew for sure was, it was going to wrap the series up, save for maybe a short story or two later.
In a nutshell, it continues the adventures of Jessica as she stumbles her way through the magical realm her best friend Howard accidentally teleported her to. She’s on her way to the southlands where Jessica hopes to find a pair of wizards to send her home. The wizards who just happen to be related to her.
Meanwhile, Howard is sent an amulet and uses it to travel to the magickal realm himself. Unfortunately, Jessica's roommate Ellen stops in just as he sets the spell in motion and she's caught up in it as well. Much adventuring ensues before they all hook up again, and then more adventuring on the way to the final battle with the evil wizard.
This excerpt takes place while Ellen and Howard, accompanied by Sebastian the bard and Kaelan the elf, are on their way to meet up with Jessica and Dominic.
“Are you sure you’re all right?” Howard asked with a frown.
Sebastian sighed. “I will prove it to you. Let me get my lute and I’ll play a tune or two.”
“I can’t believe you fell for that,” Ellen said to Sebastian.
“Fell for what?”
“Howard’s been dying to hear you play since we got to this world. He was just too chicken to ask.”
Sebastian grinned. “Is this true?”
Howard reddened and ducked his head. “Maybe. Just a little. I have heard you play, just never in person.”
The bard went over to the pile of gear and returned with his lute. Sitting down where he’d been sitting to eat his dinner, he plucked a few notes, gave a couple of the tuning pegs a turn, and turned to the three expectant faces.
“If you’ve travelled much in the human realms,” he said to Kaelan, “You will perhaps be familiar with this song. It is popular in the taverns, especially at festival time.”
The song was like an Irish reel - fast-paced and spritely. It lifted their spirits just to hear it and they had to suppress the urge to get up and dance. It was quite infectious and left them all smiling when he finished.
He segued into another and then a third before he took a break.
“Wow, you really can play,” Ellen teased.
“You play beautifully,” Howard added.
“Do you sing as well,” Ellen asked. “Or do bards only play?”
Sebastian smiled. “I have some small talent with my voice as well,” he said, with a wink towards Howard. “What would you have, a ballad? a dirge?”
“Do you know ‘The Price of a Kiss?’” Kaelan asked suddenly. His glance slid involuntarily towards Ellen before he caught himself.
The bard’s smile widened. “Indeed, a most fitting song before we retire for the night.”
From the opening cords he held them spellbound, and when the first notes of the ballade spilled from his throat they hardly dared to breathe. The song was the story of a lord who had been separated from his hunting party and came upon a fair maid who was bathing in a secluded pond.
Her beauty was so great he was instantly smitten. She showed no fear when she turned to leave the water and saw him standing on the bank. He questioned the wisdom of her bathing in alone in such a secluded place and she questioned his morals in spying on defenceless women. He gallantly turned his back while she dressed, but suggested he be rewarded with a kiss. There was no answer from her and when he turned again she was gone.
He searched for her but could find no trace. His friends, when he told them of her, told him that he’d fallen asleep by the pond and she was but a dream. Either that or a ghost. But he knew in his heart she was real, and he was determined to make her his bride. He haunted the area around the pond, offering rewards for any information of her. Finally, an old woman came to him and told him he had seen the Lady of the Forest. When he asked her where he could find this lady, he was told he could not. She would have to come to him.
He began bringing gifts to the pond - fine silks and jewellery, wines and offerings of exotic food - and always they would disappear when his back was turned. And the day came that he came to the pond, his hands empty. He told her he had one last gift to give, a song he had composed himself. Closing his eyes, he sang of his great love for her, of his regret for offending her with earthly possessions, and how although his heart would be forever hers, he would leave her in peace. When he opened his eyes, she was standing before him.
But before they could tell each other what was in their hearts, they were attacked by a band of ruffians. Telling the maid to flee, the lord faced them with his sword in hand. He fought valiantly, but although he drove them off, he was sorely wounded. As he lay near the pond, close to death, his lady came to him. She held him and cleansed his wounds with her tears, telling him she loved him as well but she’d been afraid of having to leave her forest behind. And she told him she would regret to her dying day that she had not paid him the price of a kiss.
There were tears on Ellen’s face as Sebastian finished the song, and even Howard was dabbing at the corner of his eyes.
“That was so beautiful, but so sad!” Ellen said.
“It is based on a tale my grandmother used to tell me,” Kaelan told them. “Only in the end, the lady finally kissed her lord’s cold lips and he was brought back to life. She went gladly with him to his kingdom where they spent the rest of their days together as man and wife, raising seven children to carry on their legacy of true love.”
“I think I’d like your grandmother,” Ellen said. “I definitely like the way she ends stories.”
Kaelan laughed. “I hope that you will have the chance to meet her in the Wild Woods Realm,” he said. “My thanks, master bard. Though I have heard the song many times, I have never heard it so well done as by you.”
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Friday, March 12, 2021
Tuesday, March 19, 2019
Getting It Together
Yup, that’s right. I feel like I’m finally getting my s**t together.
My depression usually gets a lot worse just after the time change in the fall, and I’ve noticed that this year it seems to be getting better now that the time has changed back again. Which begs the question, is it because of the time change itself, or is it because the sun has been making more of an effort to shine lately?
Maybe it’s a little of both. But whatever it is, I’ll enjoy it while it lasts.
I believe I’ve said it before, but it bears repeating: if you are writing a series whereupon the plot of the next book relies on events of the previous one, DO NOT write the next book before finishing the previous one!
I’ve also mentioned before that the first 50,000 words of Wandering Wizards, the third volume in my Moonstone Chronicles, were written as a NaNo novel. This is all well and good, it got the novel started, but the problem was I hadn’t yet finished Lucky Dog, volume two of the Moonstone Chronicles.
I thought I only needed to make a few minor adjustments to Wandering Wizards and then carry on. Turns out I was wrong. Oh, so wrong. For one thing, considering the series is really about Jessica and her journey, there was very little Jessica in WW. And there were a few things from Lucky Dog that had a big impact on the action in WW. And WW ended up going in an unexpected direction that was taking it well away from the story line as a whole.
Normally I get the first draft done and then worry about re-writes, but Wandering Wizards is such a hot mess that I finally broke down and printed out the current version – all 165 pages of it. THEN I discovered a second document labeled “current version”, which was about 8,000 words shorter. Which came first, the long one or the short one? I had no idea.
After wasting far too much time on Sunday trying to compare the long one to the short one, I finally got fed up and just deleted the shorter one. If I edited out 8,000 words, well, I’m sure I can edit them out again. It was stupid to waste so much time (with the potential of wasting a lot more) trying to figure out what changed between the two. And no, I didn’t think of using the track changes option in Word until after I’d already deleted the short version.
So where does that leave me? With 165 pages to edit to get the story back on track. And hopefully before I get to the end of those pages I’ll have figured out where to end the book. There’ll be a case of mistaken identity, a kidnapping, and the potential for many bad things to happen - the big question is, will the book end before or after the wizard is rescued?
Buckle up folks, it’s going to be a bumpy ride!
Prompts of the Week
Prompt one:
One day you come into work and find a cookie mysteriously placed on your desk. Grateful to whoever left this anonymous cookie, you eat it. The next morning you come in and find another cookie. This continues for months until one day a different object is left – and this time there’s a note.
Prompt two:
Writing as yourself or a character, tell the following tale:
A ghost appears before you one night and tells you to expect a visitation by three spirits who will each transport you to significant moments from the past, present and future. However, you soon discover that the three spirits aren’t quite like the ones who visited Ebenezer Scrooge…
Remember, don’t spend a lot of time on these, they’re just meant for fun. Take 5 minutes to think about it, then write for 10 or 15 minutes. And if it turns out you like what you’ve written, then by all means turn your exercise into an actual story.
Friday, September 22, 2017
Fiction Friday
Wandering Wizards, At Last!
I finally got back to work on Wandering Wizards, the third installment of the Moonstone Chronicles. In fact, I wrote this whole chapter that needs to be inserted a few chapters ahead of where I actually left off in the book. Unfortunately, it needs a bunch of changes because it needs to agree with information in the other two books.
I actually had two separate things going on, but when I wrote it I had it as just one thing. Or maybe it’s not. I have to rethink at least half of that whole chapter. This is one of the drawbacks of being a pantser and publishing a series as you go along - you can’t go back and change stuff. Well, I guess you could, but it wouldn’t be fair to the people who’ve bought the first two books in paperback.
At any rate, that’s not the scene I’m going to share today. The scene I'm actually going to share is sort of the ripple effect result of the scene I’m still working on. Which is why it’s important I fix the other one.
To set this up ... Jessica and her friends are trapped in the sanctuary inside of one of the elven realms, surrounded by dark elves who don’t know they’re there. Howard and the others were investigating the reason why all communication appeared to have been cut off from this realm and were supposed to report back to Aracelia (Jessica’s elven grandmother). Jessica and Dominic ended up there when Howard nearly died from a dose of elf bane and needed Jessica’s magic to cure him.
(not the actual cover I’ll be using, just one I came up with for NaNoWriMo)
From chapter twenty...
“We need to get a message to Aracelia,” Ellen said. “She needs to know what’s going on, to warn the other elves.”
“I tried to summon a wind imp yesterday, but was unsuccessful,” Kaelan admitted. “Perhaps someone with more power...”
“No problem,” Jessica said, turning to root around in her pack. “I can contact her with my mirror.”
Once she had the mirror in her lap, however, she just sat there looking at it.
“What’s the matter?” Dominic asked.
She looked over at him. “It’s just...” she bit her lip as she hesitated. “This will be the first time I’ve spoken to her since our blood relationship has come to light.”
“You nit,” Howard chided her. “She’s thrilled about you being her granddaughter. And we could tell she was really unhappy about keeping the truth from you.”
“If you say so,” Jessica said dubiously. Deciding it was best to just get it over with, she held the mirror a little more firmly and chanted the activation incantation, then waved her free hand in front of it.
She frowned when nothing happened and tried again.
“Shouldn’t something be happening?” Ellen asked.
“Yes something should be happening, it just isn’t,” Jessica snapped. She tried a third time with no better luck. “Maybe I’m getting the incantation wrong. Here, you try.” She thrust the mirror towards Dominic who snatched it out of her hand to avoid being jabbed in the midsection.
“What makes you think I’d have better luck than you?” he asked. “You’re the one with all the power, I’m just the muscle.”
“But you know more about magic than I do, and I just worked a major healing,” she said, gesturing towards Howard.
Dominic sighed, but did as she asked, unsurprised when he had no better luck that she had.
“This can’t be good,” Ellen said. “Maybe it’s broken.”
“Or maybe something’s interfering with its magic,” Kaelan said slowly. “Perhaps the changes the dark elves have made to the barrier are blocking your magic.”
“Like a jamming signal,” Howard suggested. “It makes sense. If there were any stray elves hiding out, they wouldn’t want them to be able to tell anyone on the outside what’s going on.”
“Okay, so how do we get in touch with Aracelia?”
“You need to boost the signal,” Ellen said. “Like on Star Trek.”
Jessica rolled her eyes. “That is so not helpful. This isn’t a T.V. show - I can’t just tell Scottie to give me more power.”
“What about this?” Howard asked, pulling the moonstone pendant from his shirt.
“What about it?”
“It was made by the elves, and it has ties to Aracelia. What if you used it with the mirror? I don’t know, wrap it around the handle or something. Maybe it would help boost the signal.”
Jessica looked at Dominic. “What do you think?”
He shrugged. “Couldn’t hurt to try.”
She took the chain from Howard and wrapped it around the handle of the mirror with the actual pendant resting on the back of it. Taking a deep breath, she tried the incantation again. This time there was a ripple in the glass.
I actually had two separate things going on, but when I wrote it I had it as just one thing. Or maybe it’s not. I have to rethink at least half of that whole chapter. This is one of the drawbacks of being a pantser and publishing a series as you go along - you can’t go back and change stuff. Well, I guess you could, but it wouldn’t be fair to the people who’ve bought the first two books in paperback.
At any rate, that’s not the scene I’m going to share today. The scene I'm actually going to share is sort of the ripple effect result of the scene I’m still working on. Which is why it’s important I fix the other one.
To set this up ... Jessica and her friends are trapped in the sanctuary inside of one of the elven realms, surrounded by dark elves who don’t know they’re there. Howard and the others were investigating the reason why all communication appeared to have been cut off from this realm and were supposed to report back to Aracelia (Jessica’s elven grandmother). Jessica and Dominic ended up there when Howard nearly died from a dose of elf bane and needed Jessica’s magic to cure him.
(not the actual cover I’ll be using, just one I came up with for NaNoWriMo)
From chapter twenty...
“We need to get a message to Aracelia,” Ellen said. “She needs to know what’s going on, to warn the other elves.”
“I tried to summon a wind imp yesterday, but was unsuccessful,” Kaelan admitted. “Perhaps someone with more power...”
“No problem,” Jessica said, turning to root around in her pack. “I can contact her with my mirror.”
Once she had the mirror in her lap, however, she just sat there looking at it.
“What’s the matter?” Dominic asked.
She looked over at him. “It’s just...” she bit her lip as she hesitated. “This will be the first time I’ve spoken to her since our blood relationship has come to light.”
“You nit,” Howard chided her. “She’s thrilled about you being her granddaughter. And we could tell she was really unhappy about keeping the truth from you.”
“If you say so,” Jessica said dubiously. Deciding it was best to just get it over with, she held the mirror a little more firmly and chanted the activation incantation, then waved her free hand in front of it.
She frowned when nothing happened and tried again.
“Shouldn’t something be happening?” Ellen asked.
“Yes something should be happening, it just isn’t,” Jessica snapped. She tried a third time with no better luck. “Maybe I’m getting the incantation wrong. Here, you try.” She thrust the mirror towards Dominic who snatched it out of her hand to avoid being jabbed in the midsection.
“What makes you think I’d have better luck than you?” he asked. “You’re the one with all the power, I’m just the muscle.”
“But you know more about magic than I do, and I just worked a major healing,” she said, gesturing towards Howard.
Dominic sighed, but did as she asked, unsurprised when he had no better luck that she had.
“This can’t be good,” Ellen said. “Maybe it’s broken.”
“Or maybe something’s interfering with its magic,” Kaelan said slowly. “Perhaps the changes the dark elves have made to the barrier are blocking your magic.”
“Like a jamming signal,” Howard suggested. “It makes sense. If there were any stray elves hiding out, they wouldn’t want them to be able to tell anyone on the outside what’s going on.”
“Okay, so how do we get in touch with Aracelia?”
“You need to boost the signal,” Ellen said. “Like on Star Trek.”
Jessica rolled her eyes. “That is so not helpful. This isn’t a T.V. show - I can’t just tell Scottie to give me more power.”
“What about this?” Howard asked, pulling the moonstone pendant from his shirt.
“What about it?”
“It was made by the elves, and it has ties to Aracelia. What if you used it with the mirror? I don’t know, wrap it around the handle or something. Maybe it would help boost the signal.”
Jessica looked at Dominic. “What do you think?”
He shrugged. “Couldn’t hurt to try.”
She took the chain from Howard and wrapped it around the handle of the mirror with the actual pendant resting on the back of it. Taking a deep breath, she tried the incantation again. This time there was a ripple in the glass.
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